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Past gloaming, with its auburn vault,
a gloom of august murmurs bump
against torn lips. "What's this?"

you ask, suspicious, as occasion twists
our plans from hands to holding. Tight,
your hips brush scars I count to mark

our nights: strings that rip and tug
a common cusp of stars in sync--a land
of coward souls. Constant, baffling

days, stark with scant account, you
vow to play with dust and dawn
among our twilight god--our thanks

for artistry. I pray without your words--
with gravity, bowing to my faith
and asking you, again, to stay.
©2008-2009 `GeneratingHype
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sex poem: a lipogram for *Writers-Workshop

for clarity's sake:

gloaming = dusk
august = venerable
Daily Deviation, 2008-01-29

Daily DeviationWorship by `GeneratingHype is a great lipogram, a product of Writers-Workshop, both of which you should check out. (Suggested by *EveningDownpour and Featured by `PoeticWar)

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Lovely poem, great rhythm. You certainly didn't make me miss the E. :)
ah, bill. thanks for taking the time. :hug:

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Something about this intrigues me. I can't say for certain what it is; perhaps the rhythm of using three lines which makes it feel somehow off-kilter a bit, and therefore somehow more real; or maybe it's the way the lines break in the middle of what could have been sentences, you you keep feeling half-finished until you reach the end.

Whatever the reason, this piece feels different somehow, more interesting. My compliments to your writing, it is indeed quite lovely.

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^^ I like it. I hope you're feeling better! :hug:

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:shakefist: one of these days i'll have that kind of handle on enjambment

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this is beautiful.
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why is this in scraps?!
:+fav:
gloamgloamgloam, Bill.

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Escape Cold Herons, Jak.
very good poem... and I've also got to ask, why is it in scraps?? its really good :clap:

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Me
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